Quality, Service, Value, Needs:
Top Dogs on Our Writing Most-Wanted List



We began our campaign against worn-out words and phrases in 2017 with three posts on what to weed from our writing (June, July, December). We hope in 2018 you’ve been on guard against those verbal saboteurs that would sneak in to weaken your prose.

This year we will also start to call out offenders that belong on our Writing Most-Wanted List. These words and phrases are more than worn out: They are grizzled veterans of survival despite being verbal vagrants for decades. They continue reappearing with the same vague and tired meanings, and the older they get, the more invincible they feel.

Our first four outlaws are quality, service, value, and needs, particularly as they apply to communication by just about any organization ranging from auto shops to finance firms to schools to healthcare centers.

Let’s look at why the words belong behind bars, at least until they’re able to offer our writing distinction and substance again.

Quality
Everyone promises it. No one retains it after reading it, because it is now to us only a word. Think of how often you’ve been promised a quality product or been told we offer you the highest quality. What exactly is it? When someone expresses to you that their quality separates them from (insert competitor here), are you convinced? Neither are we.

Service
Ours is the best. Nobody tries or works harder than we do to get the job done and ensure your satisfaction. The total, absolute, unmistakable difference between us and them is our service. Or, worse yet, we double up with quality service. Again, everyone’s heard it before, and it’s nearly impossible to prove in a message by reference alone.

Value
Many of us have said or written it: Get more value from your (or our) [insert what you offer]. It’s value-added. We move you up the value chain. In content, the word is like an egg without the yolk and white inside: It’s boring to look at, and we don’t even get its basic benefits upon cracking it open.

Needs
Although it may appear the least harmful of the bunch, it is possibly the most frequent invader, perhaps because we feel it lends a human touch. We respond to your needs. We have the resources to satisfy all of your needs. We focus on the needs of the (customer, patient, student, etc.). It can still hold a job in personal communication, but beyond being overused, it sounds mushy and meek in formal and professional writing.

Once we’ve seized these miscreants and put them where they can no longer sap strength from our writing, we might wonder what to do next. After all, they’ve been reliable go-to’s for a long time.

The solution is simple. Instead of depending on vacant, general labels, we provide our readers specifics that let them form their own ideas of quality, service, value, and needs.

Examples
Dur-a-Stop brakes are scientifically proven by three separate labs to last three times longer than the next leading competitor’s. (quality)

Our hospital provides free local transport and personal waiting rooms for all immediate family members during inpatient stays. (service)

Smart University’s teacher-to-student ratio ensures that on average each student receives 1.5 times more individual attention than at other regional schools with the same tuition. (value)

The staff at Eddie Van Hendrix’s Musical Mecca features twelve different genre experts to assist with even obscure and highly specialized requirements. (needs within the context of service)

Late-breaking news: Our international network of grammar police has spotted all four of these runaways. They are closing in on them right at this moment, and apprehension is imminent. Once we have them in custody, you can help us keep them safely away from good writing by focusing on the details that show your excellence in meeting your audience’s desire for quality, service, value, and fulfillment of needs.

Posted on Tuesday, April 17, 2018, at 11:00 pm

2 Comments on Quality, Service, Value, Needs:
Top Dogs on Our Writing Most-Wanted List

2 responses to “Quality, Service, Value, Needs:
Top Dogs on Our Writing Most-Wanted List”

  1. Robert W Mitchell says:

    Two things said that really irritate me are:
    1–In reference to a car: This new car is the most technologically advanced we have ever made. Wow. Does anyone expect you to go backward technologically?

    2–In reference to almost anything, the item lists the key points and then says “and so much more.” There is never much more

  2. Mel says:

    I had a long talk with a lady whose company contained “Quality” in the name. I told her that all “quality” really means is “conforming to a predetermined set of standards”. So by that line of reasoning, a Hyundai is every bit as much of a “quality” car as a Mercedes Benz or a Rolls Royce. The only thing differentiating them is that each company has a different set of standards. She couldn’t really come back with an answer for that one.

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